Ccbill and Text Review

[maxpower]

I have competed some of the text I am thinking about using, I was just wondering if anyone can see problems with it? I know its hard-core and this will be a 18-21 year old twink site, but I was wondering if you think its ok, and will be expectable to Ccbill. I will be glad to change things around a bit that’s why I posted it, just that the text has to fix where is belong and has to is some cases have about the same charters in a line.




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[MWCren]

Typical twink crap. Our boys are barely legal.. so fulfil your CP fantasies here! I think I've see those phrases used and over used on most eastern european fake TGPs, usually linked to borderline CP sites without any model age verification. You're pushing the envelope. Its just so tired.

[maxpower]

Well you are right I am trying to push the “Hard-Core Action” “Young Legal Guys” stuff as hard as I can. I really look at it as if I am going to make a twink site I might as well push it as hard as I possibly can. I really did try to mix up the “boy” “twink” “guy” “teen” adjectives. I also by now know not everyone likes twink stuff, its just that I did not see the need to water it down because people that are going to click on a twink site normally would not have the same problems. :wtf:

[Toni_Enzo]

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I have to say that I really WOULD LIKE TO see an 18 year old VIRGIN boy... and on top of that he waited 18 years to have sex, just to have it online... geeeze....

[maxpower]

Well was really taking the first time they had sex with a guy, You are right its all BS but did want to work the whole virgin, first time, stuff in as much as I could. But then again I am sure it dose happen, and in some of the movies I have too, its just that who can really tell

[Bec]

Most of those are rather boring. You also have a lot of typos and an awkward flow/arrangement of your statements.

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[abostonboy]

First of all "simulated child porn is legal" in the US in a 2000 court case Ashcroft vs. the Ucla. Basiaclly this means you can have a site called junior high boys as long as all the models are 18+. But just because it's legas doesn't mean visa has to approve it.

Max, why post this here? Send it over to Ccbill and get the RIGHT answer to all those questions. If you send them a text file like that they will tell you for sure.

[maxpower]

Most of those are rather boring. You also have a lot of typos and an awkward flow/arrangement of your statements.

Thax Bec that will help, I will take another look at it and make some of the changes you advise, I really do appreciate the help.

[maxpower]

First of all "simulated child porn is legal" in the US in a 2000 court case Ashcroft vs. the Ucla. Basiaclly this means you can have a site called junior high boys as long as all the models are 18+. But just because it's legas doesn't mean visa has to approve it.

Max, why post this here? Send it over to Ccbill and get the RIGHT answer to all those questions. If you send them a text file like that they will tell you for sure.

Well I posted it so I could get usable feed back like Bec has so kindly done, and so I could maybe get an idea of the text that might be the most troubling.

[maxpower]

The only thing is Bec most of your text has Click Here in it, these are not text links, they are text in the graphics of the site. They have Join Now Buttons to click, I have never seen a site say in the text click here where their is no link to click. As far as the Flow from line to line they will not be like that is the site, the lines of text are arraigned a bit weird here I guess. Really about every line will be on another page, but its just that the tour pages have about the same space for text on every page is why they are lisped like that. They should really just be take one line at a time.


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[abostonboy]

The best selling points maybe talking about what you really have in the site.

In more specific terms.

[maxpower]

The best selling points maybe talking about what you really have in the site.

In more specific terms.

I am going to give all the #'s in the site at the end near the join page, I really dont need much help with that its pretty straight forward.

[abostonboy]

At the end?

[maxpower]

At the end?

Yes will list all the #'s at the end on the join page just above the join links.

[CCBill James]

Hello maxpower,

I've copied the text from your first post and have forwarded it on to our Policy department. They have notified me that in the text's current state, it would be acceptable for use on your site.


Regards,
James A.
Client Support Supervisor
Clientsupport@CCBill.com