Ccbill and Text Review

[maxpower]

I have competed some of the text I am thinking about using, I was just wondering if anyone can see problems with it? I know its hard-core and this will be a 18-21 year old twink site, but I was wondering if you think its ok, and will be expectable to Ccbill. I will be glad to change things around a bit that’s why I posted it, just that the text has to fix where is belong and has to is some cases have about the same charters in a line.




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[MWCren]

Typical twink crap. Our boys are barely legal.. so fulfil your CP fantasies here! I think I've see those phrases used and over used on most eastern european fake TGPs, usually linked to borderline CP sites without any model age verification. You're pushing the envelope. Its just so tired.

[maxpower]

Well you are right I am trying to push the “Hard-Core Action” “Young Legal Guys” stuff as hard as I can. I really look at it as if I am going to make a twink site I might as well push it as hard as I possibly can. I really did try to mix up the “boy” “twink” “guy” “teen” adjectives. I also by now know not everyone likes twink stuff, its just that I did not see the need to water it down because people that are going to click on a twink site normally would not have the same problems. :wtf:

[Toni_Enzo]

Hmmm..".Ever Wanted To See, A Just Turned 18 Year Olds Virginity Disappears After The Deep Penetration Of A Excited Cock?"

I have to say that I really WOULD LIKE TO see an 18 year old VIRGIN boy... and on top of that he waited 18 years to have sex, just to have it online... geeeze....

[maxpower]

Well was really taking the first time they had sex with a guy, You are right its all BS but did want to work the whole virgin, first time, stuff in as much as I could. But then again I am sure it dose happen, and in some of the movies I have too, its just that who can really tell

[Bec]

Most of those are rather boring. You also have a lot of typos and an awkward flow/arrangement of your statements.

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[abostonboy]

First of all "simulated child porn is legal" in the US in a 2000 court case Ashcroft vs. the Ucla. Basiaclly this means you can have a site called junior high boys as long as all the models are 18+. But just because it's legas doesn't mean visa has to approve it.

Max, why post this here? Send it over to Ccbill and get the RIGHT answer to all those questions. If you send them a text file like that they will tell you for sure.

[maxpower]

OK quick question when is the last time someone said anything on topic in this thread? About the only 2 people that helped where Bec and James, and maybe the Downloadable DVD content was a good idea too. If you have any other text changes you think would work better, or just a line of text you do not like Please let me know. :nowords:

[abostonboy]

every time someone attempts to help you with text you get defensive. And find every excuse why its ok. It was stated your text sucks. You want someone to re write it for you? Pay Bass. She will.

[abostonboy]

or just a line of text you do not like Please let me know.

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[maxpower]

ALL OF IT!

Ya that was alot of help

[DEVELISH]

Hey

it might not be an appropriate reply to all of this, especially since I asked Lee for the moderator job he offered for this board (which I don't know if it is still available or not - especially after this). If the job is still vacant, Lee - I would be more than happy to do it if you and the other moderators still want to.

Why do y'all say that you are quite bothered or annoyed with the crap a guy posts who is obviously incaplable of taking criticism and working on the shit he asks knowledgeable people on the board for advice they generously give away for free?

Eversince I joined this board this person stood out - but rather not with wisedom or friendlyness. I have not seen such an arrogant person during my days as a moderator in a law-forum in germany. Most of the lawyers I got to know here in germany are somewhat arrogant and they worked for it - they were successfull and had every right in being either a friendly guy, a pain in the butt or dead arrogant - but none of them were learn-hindered.

I choose for myself to not reply to anything Sean is posting since it would only waste my time in a) reading his random postings b) replying to him in any way c) wanting to read when he repleatedly puts down people or insults people.

Most of you do think the same apparently but still you try to help him and still get turned away as inferior - why bother? Isn't it wasted time to show somebody how it may work after he asked but still does not even try to evaluate the criticisms and hints someone gives?
I really would like to know the reason. I found that Basschick, Lee and many others are very friendly and handsome people to talk to and ask questions via PM.

Ok, in order to not get too high on this now I am offline and will wash my car. It's a nice and sunny day here - too nice to waste it like this - but still I did - again and it somehow agravates me.

Cheers

DEVELISH

[Toni_Enzo]

OK quick question when is the last time someone said anything on topic in this thread? About the only 2 people that helped where Bec and James, and maybe the Downloadable DVD content was a good idea too. If you have any other text changes you think would work better, or just a line of text you do not like Please let me know. :nowords:

P.S. You have waaaaay too many topics open, and just listen to Bass and aBostonBoy... I could not agree with his long post more... he told you exactly what you should do, but it's obvious you still don't get it. I too am annoyed by your posts, mostly because you asks so many questions that make absolutely no sense. So as AbostonBoy said, take advices you've heard and GO TO WORK! Stop spamming the board with replying to your own replies and opening useless topics (like the ones with ccbill)... I once put you on the ignore list, and I believe I'll do it again.

[maxpower]

P.S. You have waaaaay too many topics open, and just listen to Bass and aBostonBoy... I could not agree with his long post more... he told you exactly what you should do, but it's obvious you still don't get it. I too am annoyed by your posts, mostly because you asks so many questions that make absolutely no sense. So as AbostonBoy said, take advices you've heard and GO TO WORK! Stop spamming the board with replying to your own replies and opening useless topics (like the ones with ccbill)... I once put you on the ignore list, and I believe I'll do it again.

If you think you should ignore me, FUCK if you do not like my post DONT FUCKING READ THEM.

[maxpower]

You guys spend to much time writhing all this crap do you really think I even read most of it?