Edit it waaaaayyyyy down.

1) Here's what we are looking for (body types, age, hardcore, solo, etc)

2) This is what we pay... or don't pay. Despite what Matt26z says, many models will work for free or for deferred compensation... especially the specific types you are looking for. There are lots of hairy/mature men that are total exhibitionists. Just take a look at bigmusclebear.com, bear411.com, etc. In fact, those places are excellent for recruiting models.

3) This is how it works (photo ID and release, alias name, what the model can expect on shoot day... douche for an anal scene, shave or don't shave, how long it takes, etc.)

4) What we will do with your work (will appear in print, on web, on DVD, etc.)

I agree with Matt26z. Keep all of the inside industry stuff out of the letter and don't editorialize about stuff the potential model won't care about. Save that for your webmaster customers... we like to hear that!

Btw, I'm VERY excited to see some of your work! I will certainly be a devoted customer if you can deliver some hot hairy men at reasonable prices!!